nine words…
From Cafe Writing: Option Two: Pick Three: “Pick at least three of the following nine words, and write a paragraph, scene, flash-fic, essay, blog entry or poem using them (It’s fine to change tenses, or pluralize if you want to, but please bold the words you choose): drop, evenings, glad, mist, motionless, murmur, pallid, rivulets, swoon”
The following is entirely fictional (duh).
On those mist shrouded evenings, things seemed strangely silent and a bit eerie. It didn’t bother her, though, because she knew these were the type of nights when he’d visit. Pallid, cold, beautiful, incredibly strong, he’d materialize out of the fog, his cape swirling about him, and she’d smile, glad to know he was there once again. Standing motionless, she’d swoon when he bit her, tiny rivulets of blood trickling from the wound, to drop unnoticed on the ground. He’d murmur sweet nothings into her ear while she was overcome with an intense mixture of feelings; lust, revulsion, love and somehow, pity..always pity.
Posted in Cafe Writing | 15 Comments
September 28th, 2008 at 9:20 am
Wow, that’s so cool. What a fun exercise.
September 28th, 2008 at 9:52 am
Oooh, I totally love it! It is weird that I read Pallid and though it said Palin?
September 28th, 2008 at 10:14 am
Personally vampires really REALLY creep me out but this is very nicely written.
September 28th, 2008 at 10:43 am
Absolutely awesome. Vampires? Okay. But this would be exactly how I would be if Johnny Depp bit me, except for the pity part. I wouldn’t pity Johnny, I’d pity my husband ’cause he’d have to go find another wife if Johnny Depp ever materialized from the fog and had his way with me.
September 28th, 2008 at 1:00 pm
Nicely done.
September 28th, 2008 at 1:36 pm
swoon when he bit her!
September 28th, 2008 at 3:13 pm
If you wrote a novel…I’d totally buy it!
September 28th, 2008 at 4:45 pm
Pity! What an interesting twist there at the end!!
September 28th, 2008 at 5:50 pm
Swoon…now there’s a word you don’t hear very often anymore!
Great short! You’d totally get an “A” from
the Creative Writing teacher!
You and Anne Rice, baby…vampires..oohh ~~shiver~~.
September 28th, 2008 at 8:16 pm
Very well done! Bravo!!!
September 28th, 2008 at 9:56 pm
wow…if I smoked, I might need a cigarette!
September 30th, 2008 at 8:34 pm
Oh.that’s.good. No, really, really good!!!
October 3rd, 2008 at 7:36 pm
“pity…always pity” – I love this!!
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